~A spirit's cry~

[saturn]

Me and my sister made this story but still not complete...

>Life is unpredictable and so is death. One may never expect it to come but they must rise to the occasion when needed. Especially, when they hear a spirit’s cry; for help.

A scream split across the silent night sky. A scream that foretold death.

2 days later…..

A girl with long jet black hair sat under a tree, emotionless eyes were cast out to the wide lake in front of her. ”Diana? You can’t stay here any longer; it’ll be dark soon.” said a girl with straight brown hair.” I know Elise. I just can’t believe at what happened to Shira. Here, I try to forget, but I can’t. She insisted. ”I know what you mean Diana. Shira was my best friend since childhood.” Elise sighed and continued,”But we can’t let her death stop us from living our lives. Come on. You can sleep at my house. Okay? “” Sure.” Diana replied. Diana stood up and both girls started walk away. As soon as they started walking, a breeze came and whispered with Shira’s voice, “Help me….. Diana…. Elise…..” and died. Both girls looked back, startled, and saw nor heard anything.<

Is it okay?

[Snoball13]

ooh, this is interesting... where and when is this story set?

[saturn]

i don't know with my sister... most likely it's in the country we live in....:p

[saturn]

~CONTINUATION~
>2 days ago, a young woman named Shira Stone had been murdered in her room. She was found by her sister, Diana Stone, that morning. A knife was protruding from her chest and the only clues found were the following letters, GRYY ZNG V YBIR UVZ. Yet the police have not deciphered the code and the killer has not been found. She was buried the next day.

Memories of Shira and me playing when we were little drifted throughout my mind. Then a voice said,” Diana? Diana? Wake up!”
“Huh? Oh come on Elise! I’m still sleepy!” I complained. “Don’t you have a job to go to?”<

[Snoball13]

well that was short, and didn't seem to have much to do with anything... oh well, i guess i'll prolly see the significance in that in ur next post. i can't wait!

[Kissu]

pretty good so far ^^"

[SweetBlood]

OH i like it
It seems spooky
I like

[Kissu]

spooky, haunting ..
me likey. (:

[Snoball13]

spooky, yes, but it seems like fantasy, too, so i'm totes hooked.

[saturn]

>Elise reminded me."Oh right."
Struggling to open my eyes, I saw Elise in her usual pajamas, green shirt and pants with yellow stars.
Her usual combed hair was ruffled since she had just woke up. 'What time is it?", I asked worriedly."Quarter to six. Better hurry. I already made breakfast.", she said smugly.
Elise was a great pancake maker. She had been making pancakes since she was 12 yrs. old. Jumping out of bed, I went to the bathroom. After 5 seconds, I poked my head out of the door, "Umm.... I don't have clothes or a towel..", I muttered shyly. "I knew that.", trying to stifle her giggles," I just wondered how you'd react. Just use the guest towel, I'll lend you some clothes."
"Thanks Elise."
Diana is so like Shira, Elise thought, silly and fun to be with. Shira, I really miss you.
Reaching into the top drawer of a side table near her bed, she pulled out a little transparent egg with Shira's and her pictures inside with a note that said,BEST FRIENDS FOREVER.
She shook it and little red sparkles fell down. It was Shira's best gift to her when they were in high school. She had made it all by herself.

In the scene of the crime there was an apparent struggle between the killer and victim. There were blood splashes and multiple gashes were found on the victim.
The victim is believed to have been killed at about 10-11 pm, a time when the victim was trying to sleep.
The cause of this murder may be scorn and jealousy.
The police asked her sister, Ms. Diana Stone, a few questions.
Here is the conversation:
Police: Ms. Diana, do you know anybody that could be the one who killed your sister?
Diana: Well... I'm not sure if she is the one who killed Shira but Joayne is the only one who could be the suspect. When Matt became Shira's boyfriend, Joayne was filled with anger. Since then, there were rumors that Joayne was so angry that she wanted to kill my sister.
Police: Who is this Joayne?
Diana: She was my sister's classmate in high school and also her rival in loving Matt.
Police: Thank you, Ms. Diana, for cooperating with us.

[Nunche]

Ooooh, spooky, I love it!
:D

[hunnybee1992]

i like it!
it sounds really good so far!
cant wait to read more of it ^^

[Bluewaters11]

WOW i wish i could write like that!